Tuesday, 6 October 2015

AS THE FLASHING LIGHTS CAME TOWARDS ME...

            100 word challenge

As the flashing lights came towards me...I woke up!I didn`t remember anything ,I didn`t know where I was.It was a room that smelt like burnt wood .It was empty and I was sitting on the floor all by myself.I got up and I looked around.It seemed familiar.I opened the door,"creek''.It was a house of some sort.I left the house.It was a haunted house.They said i would get my memory back.It was just a joke for HALLOWEEN!

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2 comments:

  1. Great descriptions! Try and give the reader the imagination that they are there..what are you smelling? What are you seeing? Little more details.

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  2. Hi Norah! I thought you did a great job adding different descriptions (ex:I opened the door "creek"). I really liked the fact that you included what you smelled (burnt wood), and added where you were as well (in your room). One time I went into a haunted house at my school hallowe'en dance, it was super scary! Next time remember to make all I's capital and to insert quotation marks. Maybe next time you can explode the moment (what you were seeing,feeling,thinking) a little bit more. All in all, great job :)

    From, Maya

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